Task 1 Sample Answer: Value of Exports

by Puma_andev - Rita Yem
(Shanghai, China)

These following graphs indicate the value of food, fuel, manufactured goods and the total value of exports sold overseas by one country between 2000 and 2005.

As we can observe the first graph reveals that the total value of exports slightly diminished from 2000 until 2002. However, it sharply escalated in four subsequent years, indicating the total profit of exports at 350000 million dollars position in 2003 and almost 450,000 million dollars in 2005 respectively.

The second graph shows us that the export of food remained nearly the same throughout the period, fluctuating bellow 5,000 million dollars. In comparison to the export of food, the export of fuel and manufactured goods has better showings. The export of fuel was the most valued one amongst others making up 45,000 million dollars in 2000. However, it dwindled noticeably and in 2005 was merely half of that amount. The export of manufactured goods was altering during the time designating less than 20,000 million dollars in 2000 and little more than 20,000 in 2005.

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Corrected Version:


These following The graphs indicate the value of food, fuel, manufactured goods and the total value of exports sold overseas by one country between 2000 and 2005. Overall, the value of food and manufactured good changed little over the period, whereas the value of fuel fell markedly.

As we can observe, the first graph reveals that the total value of exports declined slightly diminished from 2000 until 2002. However, it sharply escalated in the four subsequent years, indicating the showing a total profit of exports at 350000 million dollars position in 2003 and almost 450,000 million dollars in 2005 respectively.

The second graph shows us that the export of food remained nearly the same throughout the period, fluctuating bellow 5,000 million dollars. In comparison to the export of food, the export of fuel and manufactured goods has better showings showed more significant changes. The export of fuel was the most valued one amongst others the three, making up 45,000 million dollars in 2000. However, it dwindled noticeably and in 2005 was merely half of that amount. The export of manufactured goods was altering fluctuated minimally during the time, designating starting at less than 20,000 million dollars in 2000 and finishing at little more than 20,000 in 2005.

FURTHER COMMENTS

Overall it's a good answer as you have some varied sentence structures and you mention all the key information. You also make some good comparisons of each feature, rather than describing each in isolation.

Overview

Make sure you describe the overall general trends at some point in the graph - I've added this to the introduction.

Language of Change

Be careful you are using the right language - you use some which did not work, such as diminishing, altering and disignating.

"Respectively"

You don't have to use the word respectively where did as you are describing one thing. It is used like this:

Exports increased in Italy, France and Spain, by 5%, 7%, and 3% respectively.

Respectively is telling you that the numbers are being shown in the same order as the countries so we know what goes with what.