Task 1 Bar Graph Over Time:
Modes of Transport

by DRAVID
(THAILAND )

The graph shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The bar graph changes in the transports used to and from work in a particular European city for three years.

Overall the chart indicates that car used increased over the period shown, where as use of bus declined. The figures for tubes and trains both fluctuated over the same period of time.

As regard, by far the greatest proportion of commuters used bus, at nearly 40%. The figures for other means of transports- tube, car and train- were at around 27%, 22% and 19% respectively.

Between 1960 and 2000, commuters using bus fell in popularity as the figure fell to about 26% in 1980 and this fell even further to 15% in 2000. In contrast, use of car increased significantly to about 23% in 1980, before pushing the figure to well above 35% towards the end of the period. To move to train, the figures increased to about 26%, but this fell to just over 20% by 2000. Use of tube declined in 1980, in terms of tube, there was marked downward trend in 1980, before rising to a quarter in the final year.

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The bar graph illustrates changes in the transport used to and from work in a particular European city for three years.

Overall the chart indicates that car ~~used~~ use increased over the period shown, ~~where as~~ whereas the use of the bus declined. The figures for tubes and trains both fluctuated over the same period of time.

~~As regard,~~ Regarding 1960, by far the greatest proportion of commuters used buses, at nearly 40%. The figures for other means of transport- tube, car and train- were at ~~around~~ approximately 27%, 22% and 19% respectively.

Between 1960 and 2000, ~~commuters using bus fell in popularity as the figure fell~~ the popularity of the bus with commuters fell to about 26% in 1980 and this fell even further to 15% in 2000. In contrast, the use of cars increased significantly to about 23% in 1980, before ~~pushing the figure~~ rising steeply to well above 35% towards the end of the period. ~~To move to~~ Moving on to the train, the figures increased to about 26%, but this fell to just over 20% by 2000. The use of the tube declined from 1960-1980, ~~in terms of tube, there was marked downward trend in 1980~~,(you are repeating yourself here) before rising to ~~a quarter~~ 25% in the final year.

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Overall it is a good answer as you organize your response well, you describe the key features and you make comparisons as well which is important.

You also have some good language in there and use the correct tenses, but as you can see from my corrections, there are still some mistakes you are making with some of your comparison structures and phrasing.

So take note of these and keep practicing. You can view a lesson on writing a graph over time here if you have not already seen it:

Lesson: Writing about a graph over time

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Modes of Transport

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Mar 04, 2015
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comment me - Task 1 Bar Graph Over Time: Modes of Transport
by: andry

The bar chart compares the transportation method used by people in European City to commute to and from work in 1960, 1980, and 2000. As it can clearly be seen, Train and Car have an upward trend during those period, while Tube and Bus have a complete opposite trend.

In 1960, more than one-third of people went to and from work by using Bus. The trend was changed in 1980, when the proportion went down to only 26% and in 2000 the percentage plummeted furthermore to only 15%. The same goes to tube, started at well above 25% in 1960, it then fell down by 5% before finished at 25% mark in 2000.

In the other hand, only around 6% people were using car as their primary transportation in 1960. The popularity of car then increased significantly in the next period, showed by more than 15% rise in 1980. The trend is not stopped there as car finished at 35% in 2000 with another 15% surge. An upward trend also seen in train as it rose more than 10% in 1980 to just below 30% mark, although it slumped to 22% in 2000.

Overall, people used car and train in 2000 more than in 1960. While, Bus was not used as often as the preceding decades.

Jun 14, 2015
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Which band-score my essay shall get?
by: Anonymous

The graph gives information about the different methods of transport used by European commuters to and from work during the years of 1960, 1980 and 2000.

According to the data mentioned in the graph, the usage of cars dramatically increased over the years and became the most used mode of transport in 2000s with 37% of total travelers. Adversely, the usage of buses, the most popular transport in 1960s, declined from 38% to 10% in 2000s.

There are no significant fluctuations with the usage of trains and tubes during 40 years period according to the data. The percentage of the commuters using trains in 1960 was 18% with a slight increase in the next two decades to 28% and finally falling back to 22% in 2000.

The tube were however the second most popular means of transport in 1960 and 2000 with 27% and 25 % of overall users respectively.

Aug 20, 2015
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Please give reply regarding my response
by: MIKE

MODES OF TRANSPORT

The bar graph shows different modes of transports used by commuters in the year 1960,1980 and 2000.It is clear from the graph car transport had increased enormously from 1960 to 2000.

In the year 1960 nearly 20 percent of commuters had travelled by train whereas it had increased to 28 percent in 1980 and fallen to 22 percent in 2000.The car transport used by commuters in 1960 is only 5 percent whereas it increased to 22 percent in 1980 and further more it rised to 37 percent in 2000.

The other modes of transport used by commuters are tubes and buses.The tubes mode of transport had been fluctuating over years.In the year 1960 nearly 27 percent commuters travelled by tubes whereas it declined to 22 percent in 1980 and inclined to 25 percent in 2000.Regarding bus transport it had been declining continuously from 1960 to 2000.Commuters travelled by bus are decreased from 37 percent to 15 percent.
Overall,car mode of transport used by commuters had been increasing whereas bus mode of transport is declining continuously.

Oct 29, 2015
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Please answer my question?
by: Anonymous

Is it necessary to write a title for writing task 1 and 2?

Oct 29, 2015
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Please answer my question?
by: IELTS buddy

No you don't need a title.

Jan 10, 2016
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Can anyone feedback for this this WT1?
by: Siwan

The bar chart depicts the various types of transportation in an European city that commuters used for traveling to and from workplace in the three years. Overall, according to the statistics revealed that cars showed the upward trends, while buses showed an downward trends and trains and tubes displayed some fluctuations.

As can be seen, in 1960, people who went to work by trains were nearly 20%. Interestingly, the number of travelers by trains increased by approximately 28% in 1980, and for the following year, it decreased gradually at almost 20%. Tubes, on the other hand, it started from about 28% in 1960mand went down to under 25% between 1980 and 2000.

However, buses had more popularity among travelers in 1960, cars began from the lowest rate, at 7%, compared with buses had a far better off at almost 40%. Surprisingly, the number of people who went to work by buses decreased to 27% and 15% respectively in 1980 and 2000. In contrast, cars almost reached to 40% in 2000.

Feb 20, 2016
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BAR GRAPH Modes of Transport
by: DANE

The bar graph illustrates the four means of transportation utilised in a European city to commute to and from work in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Overall, the popularity of car amongst commuters significantly increased, whereas the used of bus declined. It is also indicated that there was a fluctuation between train and tube over the period.

In 1960, car was the least patronised mode of transport where it stood at only over 6 percent, while bus was considered the most popular amongst commuters, at well under 40 percent. These figures, transitioned rapidly two decades after (1980), when the usage of car sprung up dramatically at over 20%, as for bus, it dropped by over 10 percent, where it was left at slightly above a quarter. However, in 2000, this figure plummeted even further around 15 percent. In contrast, the percentage of car has risen significantly where it became the top choice for commuters at roughly 35 percent.

As for the two other methods, in 1960, tube was 7 percent more popular than train with proportions under 20% and over 25% respectively. After two decades, a figure reversal was seen and in 2000, they fluctuated back almost similarly from where they began.

Apr 07, 2016
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Hi admin, which IELTS band shall my essay get?
by: Wira - Indonesia

The bar graph illustrates changes in the transport modes used by commuters in a particular European city for three years.Overall the bar graph indicates that the car use increased over the period shown, whereas the bus use declined. The figures for train and tube both fluctuated over the same period of time.

Regarding 1960, by far the greates proportion of commuters used buses, at nearly 40%. Figures for other means of transport like tube, car, and train were approximately at 27%, 22%, and 19% respectively.

Between 1960 and 2000 the number of commuters used buses fell to about 26% in 1980 and fell even further to 15% in 2000. On the other hand, the number of commuters used cars rise significantly to about 23% in 1980, before rising steeply to above 35% towards the end of the period. Moving on to the train, the number of commuters used this transport mode increased about 26%, but fell to just over 20% by 2000. The number of commuters used tubes declined from 1960 to 1980, before rising 25% in the final year.

Jul 01, 2016
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PLEASE CROSSCHECK
by: Anonymous

PARAPHRASE

The given bar chart illustrates the variations in the means of transport used for work purposes in an european city after every 20 years from 1960 to 2000.

Aug 07, 2016
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marks
by: Anonymous

how much marks is given for the student writing samples?

Sep 07, 2016
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please rate this
by: Anonymous

The bar chart compares changes in transportation mediums used for commuting in a European city in the year 1960, 1980 and the year 2000. Overall, it can be seen that the use of the car as a transport mean showed a significant rise while popularity for buses dropped.

To begin, in 1960, bus accounted for the highest percentage of commuters among the all four transport modes at 38%. Tube, Train, and car as other means of transport were at the much lower rate at 35%, 19%, and 6% respectively. However, after two decades, the percentage of daily travelers of bus dropped dramatically to 26% and further followed by a sharp fall to 15% to be the lowest in 2000.

In contrast, use of car rose drastically from 6% to 23% in 1960 and to almost 37% in 2000 to be the most widely used mode of transport in the final year, a more than 600% increase compared to its starting value.

Train and Tube, on the other hand, saw an erratic pattern in all 3 years. Although Tube was the second most popular transport method at the beginning, it dropped by 10% after 20 years before it moved up to 25% in 2000. By contrast,the percentage of commuters in train experienced a significant rise before it fell to 22% by 2000.

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