IELTS Task 1 Writing: Bar Chart
Oil Production Capacity
by rocky
(indonesia)
The graph shows oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and 2010.
The graph compares changes in the Oil Production Capacity in millions of barrels per day in six countries.
Overall, it is clear that oil production capacity increased in all countries over a period shown. However, the most dramatic rise was apparently seen in Saudi Arabia than any of the other countries.
In 1990, Saudi Arabia produced well above 8 millions barrels per day, and this rose significantly to little above 12 million barrels per day in 2005 before soaring its output to just above 14 million barrels per day by the year 2010. In contrast, the lowest oil producing nation was Qatar under 1 million barrel per day throughout the given years although there was a modest increase in 2000.
Oil production capacity in Iran increased gradually from about 3 million barrel per day to well above 4 million barrel per day in 2010. Although the production of oil in UAE, Kuwait and Iraq tended to rise between 1990 and 2010, their production capacities reached under 4 million barrels per day by the year 2010.
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IELTS buddyFeedbackCorrected Version:The graph compares changes in the Oil Production Capacity in millions of barrels per day in six countries.
Overall, it is clear that oil production capacity increased in all countries over
the period shown. However, the most dramatic rise was apparently seen in Saudi Arabia,
which rose more than any of the other countries.
In 1990, Saudi Arabia produced well above 8 millions barrels per day, and this rose significantly to
a little above 12 million barrels per day
in 2005 before soaring
its output to just above 14 million barrels per day by the year 2010. In contrast, the lowest oil producing nation was Qatar
at under 1 million barrel
s per day throughout the given years although there was a modest increase in 2000.
Oil production capacity in Iran increased gradually from about 3 million barrel
s per day to well above 4 million barrel
s per day in 2010. Although the production of oil in UAE, Kuwait and Iraq tended to rise between 1990 and 2010, their production capacities reached under 4 million barrels per day by the year 2010.
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FURTHER COMMENTSIt's a good answer for the following reasons:
- You introduce the graph by paraphrasing the rubric (not copying it)
- You have an overview at the introduction identifying the main trends
- You organize the information well by identifying similarities and differences and grouping them together (i.e. Iraq, Kuwait, UAE - similar so grouped together, the others explained separately).
- Good grammar as there are not too many mistakes and you use the correct tense (past).
- You describle all the main features but do not go into excessive detail
Comparative StructuresBe careful with these. You say this:
...the most dramatic rise was apparently seen in Saudi Arabia than any...
You can't use
most with
than. The structure is
more than. See how I changed it.
Complex SentencesYou could try and put a few more of these in. You have 'although' twice but it would benefit by having some more (for example I put in 'which' at the beginning).
Thanks