Globalisation Essays

by Thùy Lê Thị
(Vietnam)


In some countries, minority languages are disappearing. Some people say that governments should save languages. Others disagree.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.



Many minority languages which are spoken by small populations are on the verge of disappearance. Some people believe that the governments should pour the public budget into protecting their local languages, while the detractors tend to consider that it is unworthy. This essay will analyze each side of this controversial issue.

One of the main arguments for language-saving is that language is an invaluable part of culture. Definitely, speaking help people not only with communicating but also comprehending in order to enhance their community relations. In the term of humanity science and literature, writing is the most common and useful aiming at transmitting the knowledge and wisdom. That why, as a result, the present and following generations are able to access the substantial sources of documentaries in various types such as books, hand-writing papers, novels and researches... Another reason for saving minor population spoken languages is that they are the distinctive and characteristic features of every culture therefore they play an indispensable role in attracting tourists. Consequently, not only local authorities but also their citizen incomes are possibly enlarged considerably.

On the contrary, the opponents of spending state pensions on ethnic language protection claimed that it is unnecessary. Many people claim that governments ought to make every attempt to deal with the national issues for example economic recession, environment pollution or poverty... In addition, they believed that the globalization process will be more effective and beneficial with several superior common languages namely: English, French, Spanish and even Chinese and Japanese.

Taking everything into consideration, both sides of this debating have convincing arguments, however, in my point of view, although minority languages are spoken by the small number of local people, it is crucial and perennial profitable to preserve them from extinction. The responsibilities belong to not only the administrations but also the public and communities to save the language's lives.

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Cultural Similarities

by buddy
(sydney)

Cultures around the world today are more similar than they used to be.

What are the reasons?

Do you think it is a positive or negative development?


In today’s society, people find that culture in everywhere becomes standardisation. There are several reasons that cause this happen, and there are both advantages and disadvantages in relation to this trend.

Media is thought to be the main reason that affects culture. Nowadays, most Asian countries can easily access to western culture through media platforms. For example, people are more likely to enjoy watching Hollywood movies rather than movies produced from their own countries. Additionally, tourism and migration are another factor that can have impacts on people’s beliefs. Those who have studied or traveled around the world could adapt to different lifestyle from other countries. For instance, people become independent in many ways including living alone and not relying on their families, because they have used to the western lifestyle when they went abroad.

However, it may cause people’s concern that exposure to western culture from media could hinder the use of language of a country. If audiences are constantly watching foreign movies, especially with the language of English, their native language may be abandoned as they speak and read in English predominately. Nevertheless, I believe that it is a positive trend that people could adapt to the other’s culture. For example, Asian food such as sushi is widely accepted in many western countries, and they are not only love the food but also enjoying using chop sticks. Therefore, food becomes a bridge that is connected between western and eastern, allowing people to have fun by sharing the other’s culture.

In conclusion, various reasons can cause culture become more similar, and I believe that the benefit of this development outweigh its drawback.

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I'd appreciate any feedback for my globalisation essay on culture.

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Sep 18, 2015
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exellent
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good.essay is really interesting .very good

Dec 19, 2015
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more than excellent
by: Shivam

It is a very good essay from my view on culture which provides essential knowledge.

May 17, 2016
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Good essay
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Just 1 question:
Please correct me if I am wrong but I think the word standardisation should be replaced with standardised?

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Same Products Around the World

by An-Thien Ho


Hello,

This is my second post to forum. Hope this globalisation essay is better than the 1st one.


Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?


As a result of globalization, goods have been spread all over the world, make the markets in different regions are all the same. People are deeply divided over the decision whether this consequence is beneficial or not. In my opinion, this is a tremendously extraordinary development for the people around the globe.

Firstly, for individual families, there are no longer ingredients or materials that are out of reach. Plenty of type of goods or food can only be produced in specifically places due to the climate, soil condition and many other aspects. For instance, it is well known that pistachio nuts are being exported from minority of number of countries, or Maple Syrup is made only in Canada. It is a substantial achievement of the global trading system that ratify people to enjoy foreign products without travelling thousands of miles to the original countries.

Secondly, with the achievement, there are multifarious choices of one product around the world on the shelves for people to decide. A kind of product from different regions can give different experiences to the users. Coffee beans are an excellent example for this statement. While coffee beans in Italy are pure bitter, coffee grown in South East Asia countries usually have an additional sour flavor beside the bitter taste. The difference of the ingredients has lead to manifold version of the production. Western coffee is light, creamy and sweet, whilst famous Vietnamese coffee is dense, strong.

Last but not least, for a larger scale ­- national scale, it requires remarkable effort to maintain the supply to fit the demand. The onus is on the scientists to develop advanced technology to elevate the productivity and hasten the goods transportation. The benefits of those technology will soon be applied to normal life. It is promulgated that the Industrial Revolution in the 19th century in Britain was initiated by the demand to transport goods more efficient in quantity and time delivery. It has formed the foundation for the astronomically escalation of civil technology in our modern world.

In recapitulation, I advocate of aforementioned statement. The products worldwide have been delivered to our nearby stores within our line of sight, offers us heterogeneous goods as well as experiences. Furthermore, it is a base for the advanced technology repercussion in the future.

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May 20, 2016
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Similarity of Countries Essay
by: IELTS buddy

Hi Heidi,

Are you writing these essays in 40 minutes?

You have a lot of words - 381 in this essay. That very long.

Most people are advised to aim for around 275. This means you have time to analyse the question, brainstorm ideas, plan and write and check grammar.

Of course if someone is a very good writer they may be able to write more than that, but most students struggle to do everything in 40 minutes so need to keep it fairly short and concise.

The essay is ok with some good vocabulary and grammar in there, but you do have some noticeable grammar errors - so you are better to write less and focus on improving that aspect.

Also I don't really see what relevance body paragraph 3 has to the question, and I am not sure what the topic / argument is.

That suggests a lack of planning.

May 26, 2016
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by: A maybe-lucky 8.0 writer

Agree. I've read your 2 essays, and the 2nd one was not as impressive as the first. However, examples here are better. One thing, why do you have to write the 4th paragraph? That's a waste of time. Making your other 2 more impressive is a better choice.

I hope you will get the score you want. Good luck.

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The Positives and Negatives of Globalization

by Neha

Can anyone review my writing?

Even though globalization affects the world’s economics in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten.

Discuss.


Globalization is a term which is widely used in today's era. This one word not only has influenced our attire, but also our culture. It is undeniable that globalization helps in world's economy but at the same time we have to accept that it has some negative consequences also.

Today, many multinational companies have set up their branches in poor countries by doing this they get man power at low price, whereas, people of poor nation get work opportunities in a larger scale. With globalization everything has become much more accessible, one can get the product manufactured at 1000 miles away at a shop, which is just few steps away from their door. We can see people of different counties wearing the same t-shirt, which in turn brings uniformity in them towards each other. Globalization has especially helped in woman empowerment and has given them equal work opportunities anywhere in the globe.

Despite of all the goodness, which globalization has brought to us, it has many negative counter parts. People in country like India have started following the trends of western countries without understanding their pros and cons. Where globalization has brought malls and multiplexes it also brought old age home. It also causes the danger of epidemic diseases bird flu is good example of this which was faced by many Asian countries. Brain drain again is a big issue for developing countries like India, a country invest a big sum of money for higher education in few premier institutes but at the time of pay back, pass out, students prefer to work in abroad.

Finally, I can conclude that negative impacts of globalization should not be forgotten. Need and requirement varies from place to place and any trend should not be followed blindly be it globalization.

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Globalization and Education
by: IELTS buddy

Essay 1

Your first essay is good but the second body paragraph is a bit let down by this sentence:

"Where globalization has brought malls and multiplexes it also brought old age home".

I don't know what this means. Also, this needs a bit more explanation of how it is related to globalisation.

"It also causes the danger of epidemic diseases bird flu is good example of this which was faced by many Asian countries".

Essay 2

In your second essay this is confusing, I think because of your grammar. I don't really understand what point you are making:

"A country called a developed country if it is facilitating its people good food, health care which is accessible to everyone, and equal work opportunities, in short, a healthy life style".

Don't start giving analogies in an academic essay - it does not add any extra information:

"To define the life cycle of the development of a country similar to food chain, we can replace oxygen by education".

Your conclusion does not directly relate to the question or your body paragraphs:

"To conclude, I can say that yes education is critical factor at any point of time it should not be ignored".

The question says it is the ONLY critical factor. You have not answered this in your conclusion. In your first body paragraph you seem to say it is NOT the only critical factor.

You must be consistent.



Apr 12, 2015
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The essay falls in moderate to very good range
by: Anonymous

The overall length is sufficient to explain the implications introduced in this essay. paraphrasing is perfect and connectivity in them is quite obvious. Language usage reflects variety. Examples are given in general and specific. In IELTS it can fetch you band score within a range of 6 and 7.

Try adding quotations like 'Every coin has two sides' if possible and other quotes also. This adds variety. Also add prompts with question tags and interjections especially ending paragraphs. Thanks

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Essays on Globalization and Education
by: IELTS buddy

Actually you should avoid phrases such as 'Every coin has two sides' because this is not an academic phrase.

Idioms are best left for the speaking test.

Also, question tags can often look out of place and need to be used very sparingly and carefully, and are best avoided if you do not know how to fit them in well.

Mar 18, 2016
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errors
by: Anonymous

Essays are good but please avoid grammatical errors.

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Death of Languages

by Murad
(Azerbaijan, Baku)

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


These days, when you turn on the TV or flick through the pages of newspaper, you learn about the death of languages. Every year several languages die out due to the fact that people are trying to use the languages which are foremost and common. There are several inadequate languages and without them life will be easier, however, this is refuted by others. All arguments will be weighed prior to reaching an informed conclusion.

First of all, many people believe that death of languages is not essential, because there are lots of languages and the massive number of languages can entail some problems for the people. For example, people who are dealing with business and trying to make relations with foreigners should learn several languages. However, for this purpose, there are several languages which is common and all people try to learn them and use them for alleviating some communication difficulties. Also, common languages make education and life appropriate for foreigners. This examples show clearly that death of languages is not important due to the fact that people need common languages for easier life.

On the other hand, many people argue that all languages is vital for us. They believe that languages show our roots and they are symbols of our generations. For instance, people will not be eligible to learn about their history without languages. Furthermore, habitants always have a penchant for learning the traditions, customs and life style of their generations and without language it is impossible. It is easy to see why this argument has garnered a lot of support.

To sum up, it is believed that some languages are dying out and it is not vital, however others think that it is essential for learning about our roots.

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May 21, 2015
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your opinion?
by: Anonymous

to what extent do you Agree or Disagree?

you have just discussed both the views.

where is your agreement or disagreement statement?


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