by Mepa
A waste of money?
Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
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by Jordan
Some people think that the government should not put money into building theatres and museums, but spend more money on medical care and education.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, the question of whether the government should allocate more money to the construction of theatres and museums or the development of medical care and education has become controversial. Some people suggest that the construction of theatres and museums needs to be given priority. However, I advocate putting more money into medical care and education. There are several reasons to support my view.
First, medical care and education are the basic needs of the general public. The opportunity of receiving medical care and education is indispensable to members of a modern society. Human beings get sick, so they need to receive medical care. Human beings need to learn in order to make a livelihood, so they need to be educated. Their needs of receiving medical care and education are thus related to the nature of human beings, which is an inflexible demand. In addition, satisfying people’s basic needs is an imperative for accountable governments. If a government cannot deliver fundamental medical care and education to the public, it will inevitably discredit its people whom it governs. As a result, the legitimacy of the government gradually declines, costing the whole society stability and solidarity.
However, the view of those who suggest putting more public funds into building more theatres and museums are understandable. They care more about the cultivation of people’s sense of art and culture. But I need to point out that these are not basic needs of people, lessening the necessity of such a suggestion.
In conclusion, the need of putting more public funds into medical care and education overwhelms that of allocating more public funds to the construction of theatres and museums.
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by melodi beyaz
(Turkey/İstanbul)
All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
There is an argument that students should be required to study arts and music. I completely agree with this statement for two reasons. Arts and music helps students to be more creative and also it helps students to relax their busy schedule.
First of all, arts and music help people to be creative. In secondary school, student have more tendency to learn new things. If they receive arts and music education they will not only become more creative but also, possibly develop interest in this relevant area. Even, if they don't like arts and music, they will learn to evaluate problems from a different angle.
Secondly, nowadays all students are very busy and they need relaxation. Good music can help students to relax and forget about their problems. They always work hard for their lessons so they have to be relax in during school day It is true that maths, science and history are very important lessons but they can be too hard for them in a they therefore there needs to be arts and music.
In conclusion, every family wants their children become to be a doctor or an engineer but they never think about their abilities. Ideally, they need to start learning art and music in secondary school for finding their tendency.
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by Tom hank
(Georgetown, penang, malaysia)
Hi Guys,
I am attending the IELTS test in this coming September '15. Can anyone out there share me your comments of below drafted essay? Thanks in advance.
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by lin
(china)
IELTS buddies please make a comment on my following essay that i chose the topic from model essays. my essay words is more than 300 and i want to reduce to around 280, but it is hard for me to change it. i follow the structure from buddy's ebook.
here is my essay below
Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
These days, governments spend a large part of the budget on public services and the arts. While I agree that it is important to provide funding to public services, I do not believe that money spent on the arts is a waste.
The obvious benefit of supporting public services is to ensure that general public would have a reasonable quality of life. For example, increasing funding on public hospitals would allow citizens to access necessary medical treatments without worrying about expensive medical costs and this in turn can provide citizens with a sense of security. Apart from the medical benefit, education is thought to be another advantage that bring by government support. Increase the money on education means that schools are able to expand teaching resources together with reducing school fees. As a result, families with financial disadvantage are more likely to afford school fees, which allow everyone to access education with equal opportunity.
Nevertheless, I believe that it is not a waste of money for governments to expand funding on the arts. To begin with, national museums and art galleries can serve as a dedicated area for visitors to take their first step towards learning. As these places usually organize interactive exhibits and special activities that encourage learning through play, it can tap on people’s creativity. In addition, citizens can experience the entire transformation of their countries and cities, as pictures and video resources are kept in museums. Take city of Shanghai as an example, local residents feel proud of their city’s rapid developments and remarkable achievements through watching documentary film, as they realize that their city used to be just a small fish village. There is no doubt that art galleries and museums have changed people’s perception in many ways and this would not have been possible without government funding.
In conclusion, it seems to me that government funding on the arts and public services are both necessary.
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by Helen Nguyen
(Cassino, Frosinone, Italy)
Hi everyone,
I'm very happy that I found this forum of Ielts buddy. I'm practicing for Ielts writing especially task 2. However, I did get a lot of troubles when I'm self-study because there is no one helping me to evaluate and correct my work. I really hope that I can post my essay here and have someone read and corrected it for me. I very appreciate the help from you guys and I'm welcome all your comments. This is the latest topic that I have written.
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by dev
(Philippines)
Should the government continue to fund various kinds of arts like musicians, painters and poets or not anymore?
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people are of the view that the government should support artist such as, musicians, painters and poets through funding, but others disagree with this view. I strongly agree with the former argument because of several reasons.
For those who believe that officials should no longer contribute any money as a means of support, it can be said that the leaders must focus deeply on major problems in the country, rather than focusing on the improvement in arts and entertainment. For instance, in my country Philippines, it is not practical and necessary for the government to allocate funds for artists because poverty is widely seen around the community. Thus, the priority in providing food, clothing and shelter for the marginalized group is the best option in spending funds.
On the other hand, I believe that artists should be supported financially by the government because it is one way where the country can gain profit through the tourism industry. It is undeniably true that, artists have a great contribution in promoting national history and culture through their unique and creative works. Without improvement in this area, it is most likely that less people will become interested in exploring different talents of the locals and thus, individuals from other nation having a tour would not understand clearly the country's antiquity.
In my experience, traveling in different places makes it more meaningful and exciting when I have come to learn the history and a chance to interact with other individual having different beliefs and I believe, this can be achieved through arts and entertainment.
The conclusion of the matter is that, artists need support from the government to grow and to help attract more foreigners to visit the place and as a result, the community can save money which can be used for the improvement of the country as a whole.
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by Zeki
(İstanbul)
In many countries, government sponsorship of the arts costs millions in taxpayers money. There are many more important things to spend Money on.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people want to buy original art, hence they peaces can be enormously expensive. Also, governments support this trade because the government will take tax from each trade, but there are many essential things to spend money.
Nowadays, some well-known people are buying a picture made by DA Vinci and they are paying lots of money. For example, recently, someone took the picture and paid about 10 million dollars. As we known, governments will take %15 tax for this trade from the trader. This price is more expensive than many things. This case must be controlled and under the control of governments. For example, that half of money could save many lives or could build a school for poor children.
Also, government, earning money from this trade, under called name is taxable. Governments are supporting because they need money and they need the tax. For this reason government can be sponsorship of the arts trade. Many people are expecting service from the governments and they know need money for service, but that enormous amount of money can be spent more beneficial organizations.
To sum up, I have never supported this case and I think, this must be under the control of government. Maybe create a fund and transport the specific percent of trade amount to fund and maybe that money can use for beneficial, for example build a school or help to the Africa's children.
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by Fahad
Please Evaluate and point out error and mistakes.
Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films.
Why could this be?
Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?
Film industry flourished dramatically over the last few years. Technological advancements have made a big contribution in the success of this industry. Countries such as India, USA etc. are highly dependent on this industry. Their governments are financially supporting to achieve better and long lasting result. They are in the process of sticking people to watch their own locally produced movies.
There are several reasons of shift in term of watching movies. Nowadays, people are smarter; they do not want to waste their time and money for an ordinary movie. They want quality movie, which has big cast, good camera work, full of emotions and suspense. In addition to this, they want something new and unique. This is why they are pursuing towards foreign films.
Lack of funds is one of the vital reason in competing other movie industries. People are reluctant to work in local films because they have been paid very less. These people try to find their career in other countries because of high income and appreciation. Government should support their local film industry in order to equip with latest technology such as cameras, software and trainings. The good work of celebrities should be acknowledge and awarded by the government, this will encourage good people to join and serve for this industry.
In conclusion, I would to say that with mutual support of government and people, will definitely help local film industry to grow immensely. This will later turn as fruitful tree for our economy.
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by sacmanitin
Please evaluate my Task 2 writing :
Also if you can indicate what band this can achieve.
Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere.
To what extend do you agree with this view?
Each country’s government has one of the most important responsibility to use its resources in such a way that it address the most essential needs of the country. Looking into this context, for developing nations, where food, clothing and shelter related requirements are yet not addressed fully, how logical it is to spend money on art and art related causes, when these funds can be utilized for addressing other essential needs of country and its people. Although routing the money to other different cause, which look more primary in nature, look like the right choice, promoting and nurturing art provide equally important benefits to a state if not higher. In this essay, we will discuss how art is a must area to take care of .
First of all, when the government support art institutions through subsidy and grants, it support the entire fraternity whose livelihood depends on the well-being of art. Thus, it help in providing sufficient life support to artist and people who are connected to arts for livelihood. In this way, such government support help thrive the art segment.
Secondly, art not only provide just a medium for earning, it also bring the creative side of individuals. These skills are very important for out-of-box thinking. This is evident when you consider the fact that many organizations and universities give special preference to artists as they know it is a rare breed to cultivate synthetically.
At the end, art for any country, is known to be deeply connected to its culture and value system. In the present era of globalization, which also bring the ill effect of weakening ties to our roots, art keep these connection alive and strengthen the character of a person.
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